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172 - To Make Me Better by ~saro-n-mizary:iconsaro-n-mizary:





I wanted to watch the white lines
    pass us as we began to run
  blurring into curves and a path
                   something solid to cling to

Why are you
      why are we
          always running from what we need most?


In some way, you always seem to fit
     flow with those passing dashes
  separating each into
                elemental moments
       based upon false premonitions

Why are you
    why are we
             trapped by our bad habits and thoughts?


And in some way, I never did fit
          within that mis-painted room
     writing a bitter song
                writhing in the heat of your embrace
     swearing that all I needed
              was to be better
while I was at my best
        tearing at the seams of my mind
    and leaking out the corner out of my eye
              painting pictures of pain-filled clouds
        trying to rip from the seams of the sky

I feel better
        much better…
©2007-2009 ~saro-n-mizary
:iconsaro-n-mizary:

Author's Comments

A lot of this is inspired by my struggles recently, and my desire (but not the true will) to just run away from it all.

Another source of inspiration was from the song "A Bitter Song" by Butterfly Boucher go to [link] to check it out.

I'm sorry I've gotten behind.

Comments appreciated.

~*~

A Bitter Song ~ Butterfly Boucher

All I need is a bitter song
To make me better
Much better
All I need to write is a bitter song
To make me better
Much better

It found me to hold me
But I don't like it at all
Won't feed it,
Won't grow it
It's folded in my stomach;
It's not fair,
I found love;
It made me say that.
Get back,
You'll never see daylight;
If I'm not strong it just might.

All I need is a bitter song
To make me better
Much better
All I need to write is a bitter song
To make me better
I feel better
I feel better

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:iconshigo:
do i need to give you another lesson in writing happy poems? ltmq it was good, and very unique, i think

and you know, i read 'blurring lines' and an image of... well, tatsuya from MARS, only the guy from my taiwanese drama running on the track until all the white lines blurred...

no! even better! from 'filled lip' the little brother loved to run until everything lost color and just became white, as if nothing really existed in the world but him.

see how good you are? you make me picture stuff. that's really hard to do most of the time, since my inner eye has astigmatism. ^.~

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"I think it'd be cool to be a guy. Or a giraffe. No, an eagle. An eagle'd be coolest." - Barbara Jean

visit me at adultfanfiction.net --> Nomme de Plume ^_^
:iconwycarnfife:
I like it...your usual emotions transformed directly into words.....

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:iconsaro-n-mizary:
Lol, you're such a dork, but I love you sweetie.

I'm glad I got you to picture something.

--
I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconvespera:
hmmmmm reminds me of what I was feeling three or so years ago... four? five? god... I´ve already been out of Highschool four and a half years...


in conclusion,
I just realized I´m old ;)

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Realize, sometimes I fall in love from a poem,
each language is its own passion
each syntax, a new religion,
and new words, a romance
I get lost in.
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
i'm more than glad to finally be out of highschool...but yea i think these moods come and go throughout our lives...

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconvespera:
yea, I just hope that I learn something helpful each time...

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Realize, sometimes I fall in love from a poem,
each language is its own passion
each syntax, a new religion,
and new words, a romance
I get lost in.
:iconhell-on-a-stick:
i really like your style. its kind of roundabout without being roundabout.

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I tell you such fine music awaits in the shadows of the fires of hell. -Charles Bukowski
[link]
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
again thank you, lol I guess i kind of see what you mean

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped

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