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Losing the Passion

     Upon tip-toes, she flew to her last fall. Like an angel without wings, she dared to dance until her very last breath. Each element within her legs tensed as she tediously executed each move. Every muscle contained by her flowed with her emotions, and her emotions with the music. This was her love, her one desire. In the arms of the pain she wanted to pass.
     She cried bloody tears of joy mixed with the ache of the knowledge of what would become of this. Her wounds would never heal, thus she danced until her demise on stage. The entire world would know of her beauty, her devotion, her passion. No one being would ever dance without whispering her name.
     Her body quickly diminished through the exiting wounds, but with all her strength she gracefully allowed herself to be pushed by the wind of her accompanying instruments. The flutes and violins like a hurricane to her thinning body. She slid along the pool of her blood until her ankle finally broke.
     Falling, she landed with such elegance that all thought it was part of the performance. Who knew that such morbidity could cause such joy for the audience? All smiled as she sat there slowly moving her arms with the movements of the melody. Lost to blissful thoughts she slipped into her last sleep. Her own blood filling her lungs as she laid there, unable to move from her elegant fall.
                            Rescue me tonight, love me back to life…
©2003-2009 ~saro-n-mizary
:iconsaro-n-mizary:

Author's Comments

well there is alot to say about this piece
First of all
this isnt what i portray it to be about
yes, it talks of dancing and seems very dark
and maybe it is
But it isn't not meant in the context that it is directly written in
This girl's passion for her art can be just about anything
mostly about how we try so hard for the thing we love
how we give everything to the one person or thing we love
till we die from the effects of it all
i'm sorry for those who read this
i dont mean to spoil anything
but i want people to read more into this
this has a deeper meaning to me than probably anything else i might have wrote
ok...there are a few that mean more to me...
but either way


yea...

look past the skin, please?

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:iconvespera:
This is incredibly sad... =( I'm not sure if you meant it or not, but the last line is really jarring. Seems almost out of place, but it definately leaves an impression.

Dancing, it seems, is a lot like writing...

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Your musky lips, cramping smoke into halos,
love to finger obscenities and slander. I am a bitch now.
Don’t touch her now, this thing of waste. She’s
Empty. She’s full of spite.
:iconmorbidsoul:
This is really pretty and sad, I like it (though I know nothing about writing).
The end, specifically, is beautiful.

Makes me wish I could write.
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
The last line...yea..it's not mine it's from bon jovi's Love me back to life

yea...but its the line that is supposed to show you to my frame of mine
to what i was trying to refer to
what my "dance" is...

btw...yea dancing is alot like writing
that's is why i love it
even though im no good at it
tkd is also like writing too...

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
I bet you can write
if you really want to...just do it...
trust me you may be surprised
i promise, it's like drawing...just with words
i dont know much about writing myself
things just come to me

thank you mucho much for the comment
it means alot

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconriistar:
A modern cry that turns to a diminishing whisper, ushered towards the blackness, hands plam up... Pleding, and in those last moments not wanting to be forgotten, to leave your mark, to depart in a manner that is almost fitting to those who view... Your mind is what you think, but your heart is what you desire...

Brilliant, its jarring, raw; and shocks the reader into a heartfelt sorrow brought about by those chilling last words...

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:nirvana: "Not all who wander are lost" :confused:
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Check Em Out!
~dark-writing~~etoilerose~*with-pen-in-hand~`deaddreamer~~dcmbrnite
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
thank you thank you thank you
*was looking desperatly for a comment like this*
:hug:

i love hearing what people get from reading what i write
what people gather and understand
how they were touched
it just means alot to me
gives me this feeling of accomplishment in a sense i guess
thank you thank you
:hug:

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped
:iconlost-mister-me:
wow. lol. i dont know exactly what to tell you.

"She cried bloody tears of joy mixed with the ache of the knowledge of what would become of this. Her wounds would never heal, thus she danced until her demise on stage. The entire world would know of her beauty, her devotion, her passion. No one being would ever dance without whispering her name."
that whole part and the last part was great. since you said so, i read this one a few times very slow picking more out each time. and it seems to cry out many things at once.......hmm. you really did an EXCELLENT job on this one. its just so descriptive and vivid. always in few words you say so much. this is probably one of your best and better than all of mine and i think im gonna have to +fav this one too lol. hmmm. i said i didnt know what to tell you, but it looks like i did. it made me think a lot. amazing piece mary....simply amazing.
+fav.

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"If you can't get someone out of your head, maybe they're supposed to be there."
"She walks away and he faithfully follows."
:iconvespera:
I think music is a lot like writing...
oh wait
they write lyrics for music....


*wanders off*

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Your musky lips, cramping smoke into halos,
love to finger obscenities and slander. I am a bitch now.
Don’t touch her now, this thing of waste. She’s
Empty. She’s full of spite.
:iconsaro-n-mizary:
thank you very much for your insights
as always it means alot
and your fav is always amazing to me
when i wrote this
the first thing i wanted was for everyone to read it
...so that maybe i can understand people more...so i know what others really think...

thank you so much for reading

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I have no more cute things to say, this is just me stripped

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